Like, what can I say about this? Just almost cried many times on this VN, it have the kind of balance between the humor and the sad things, with some references (like Amacus), I really enjoyed playing this VN, and I surely hope that it doesn't get discontinued, else I'll really cry. Sorry, dunno what else to say, so good luck with the writing! xD
Thank you heaps for the review! I'll be sure to work on the writing and lots more to create the best experience possible :) I still got some tricks up my sleeve ;)
Thanks alot for the review! :) It's so motivating to hear such great responses :) I'll be sure to improve the writing and lots more to further enhance the experience :))
So far I am really enjoying this, really feels very slice-of-lifey and genuinely made me laugh a couple of times. Just a few small suggestions: while I liked the Adastra reference i do think it goes on too long and I am not sure how the creators feel about that; i enjoyed that your story is both very light and also hints at darker themes, but like another commenter pointed out, maybe fix the pacing a little so there is more time in between the funny vs sad moments. Overall I can't wait to see your progress in the future and hope this project turns out successful.
On an unrelated note, what are the VN's that inspired this game, or what are your favorite ones?
Thank you very much for your review! I'll try to do something about the reference of adastra, and ofcourse I'll rework the pacing of the game :) (These reviews are really giving me important insights and I'm learning a lot c:)
VN's that inspired? The first vn i played was Extracur Activ. which had very enjoyable routes, Afterclass had great romantic chemistry aswell, and the linear story-line is adapted from Adastra (an incredible vn I had never seen before, the writing is fantastic).
Mostly those popular titles, I like them all but Adastra just seems to "shine" out of all the genre Furry Visual novel. It showed how games of these genre can't just be stereotyped as explicit nsfw, It showed that games like these can also touch one's emotions in a beautiful way :)
The writing in this is really good and I did get really invested in the story, I like all the characters so far, my only critique for this visual novel is a small detail the fact that the main character never cleared up the fact that Phileo was forced to ask about the underwear with Leo, oh and the fact that sometimes the main characters name resets to Ludus at times. Other than that I love the story and characters so far, I am really exited for the next update!!
I'll make it a regular 2 updates a month, 3 if I can. Tho, each update will be a chapter of the story (this one here is just chapt 1)and the length would be 15k words and above so thats pretty long, so the next update will contain story fixes along with chapter 2. Chapter 3 next update, and so on. :)
first of all, i like the character interaction it has its cute, funny and sad moments, the story has a lot of potential but one thing that bothers me is the pacing of the story, its too fast in my opinion, like we get thrown a lot of key information from left and right simultaneously through out the game, i get that this is your first build and you want to tell the complexity of the story but we gets too much information on day 1 especially when this is a slice-of-life visual novel, in my opinion you can divide this first build to 3 days instead of just 1 to get a better pacing, like decide a key topic/information for each day and fill the rest of the day with the characters contemplating on that subject or fill it with a banter/skits or normal conversation between characters since its a slice of life vn.
other than that, the character sprites are nice, the music fits. i'm looking forward to the next update and what kind of improvements that you make later on. :D (sorry for my grammar btw, english is not my main language)
Wow, having great insights like these are incredibly helpful! Thank you! I'll definitely focus on improving the pacing and lots more. Again, thank you for such a good review! :)
also, would you like to join our furry visual novel community on discord where we discuss, give feedback, ask help and all that jazz with other developers and people? here is the link if you are interested https://discord.gg/GFjSPkh
While I haven't had a chance to check out the game I felt a few comments were warranted. (These are meant to be constructive so please do not take anything I say negatively.)
You may want to modify the color scheme for this page. Specifically the orange text, as it's simply too difficult to read against the blue.
That second screenshot of yours may want to change as well, firstly because I'm unsure if you actually contacted the Echo team to use a blatant image from Adastra or not on that TV screen. (If you did good on you, if you didn't I recommend you do that... Now, as even if it's meant to be complimentary you can't just use their assets like that, at the very least they should be in your credits which would in no way substitute asking their permission.)
Additionally censoring the curse words is an interesting writing choice especially if you do intend for this to be NSFW at some point. Especially when it's very easy to tell what the word is to begin with making the censorship pretty pointless overall. But I understand if it's just a deliberate choice on your end.
thank you! I actually haven't contacted echo about using a screenshot about their game xd. I'm an avid fan myself so i thought little cameos would be alright. Ill update it asap.
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Really looking foward to this project! Also, is there any place we can follow you aside from itchio? Like twitter or FA?
I'm sorry, there isn't at the moment but I've yet to create one soon :)
just a short demo but i am hooked. really looking forward to what more to come
um.... does it already have a sex scene
omg no sorry xd
ahahahah
Like, what can I say about this? Just almost cried many times on this VN, it have the kind of balance between the humor and the sad things, with some references (like Amacus), I really enjoyed playing this VN, and I surely hope that it doesn't get discontinued, else I'll really cry. Sorry, dunno what else to say, so good luck with the writing! xD
Thank you heaps for the review! I'll be sure to work on the writing and lots more to create the best experience possible :) I still got some tricks up my sleeve ;)
Man I absolutely LOVE the humor in the game haha, some scenes I couldn't stop myself from laughing out loud!
The characters reaction and dialogue feel very real and natural!
I really REALLY look forward to future updates, keep up the amazing writing!
Thanks alot for the review! :) It's so motivating to hear such great responses :) I'll be sure to improve the writing and lots more to further enhance the experience :))
Not sure if this is an issue on my end, but I noticed your project doesn't have a thumbnail :o.
It's probably a good idea to add a picture so your project gets noticed by more people. <3
Oh, I actually haven't uploaded a thumbnail yet. Thank you c:
So far I am really enjoying this, really feels very slice-of-lifey and genuinely made me laugh a couple of times. Just a few small suggestions: while I liked the Adastra reference i do think it goes on too long and I am not sure how the creators feel about that; i enjoyed that your story is both very light and also hints at darker themes, but like another commenter pointed out, maybe fix the pacing a little so there is more time in between the funny vs sad moments. Overall I can't wait to see your progress in the future and hope this project turns out successful.
On an unrelated note, what are the VN's that inspired this game, or what are your favorite ones?
Thank you very much for your review! I'll try to do something about the reference of adastra, and ofcourse I'll rework the pacing of the game :) (These reviews are really giving me important insights and I'm learning a lot c:)
VN's that inspired? The first vn i played was Extracur Activ. which had very enjoyable routes, Afterclass had great romantic chemistry aswell, and the linear story-line is adapted from Adastra (an incredible vn I had never seen before, the writing is fantastic).
Mostly those popular titles, I like them all but Adastra just seems to "shine" out of all the genre Furry Visual novel. It showed how games of these genre can't just be stereotyped as explicit nsfw, It showed that games like these can also touch one's emotions in a beautiful way :)
The writing in this is really good and I did get really invested in the story, I like all the characters so far, my only critique for this visual novel is a small detail the fact that the main character never cleared up the fact that Phileo was forced to ask about the underwear with Leo, oh and the fact that sometimes the main characters name resets to Ludus at times. Other than that I love the story and characters so far, I am really exited for the next update!!
Thank you for your review! :D I'll see what I can do those small detail :))
Wow, I really like the character CGs. Just curious about the update time. Monthly or what? Look forward to the next build!
I'll make it a regular 2 updates a month, 3 if I can. Tho, each update will be a chapter of the story (this one here is just chapt 1)and the length would be 15k words and above so thats pretty long, so the next update will contain story fixes along with chapter 2. Chapter 3 next update, and so on. :)
Btw thank you :)
good job with this vn i really like it.
thank you! :)
first of all, i like the character interaction it has its cute, funny and sad moments, the story has a lot of potential but one thing that bothers me is the pacing of the story, its too fast in my opinion, like we get thrown a lot of key information from left and right simultaneously through out the game, i get that this is your first build and you want to tell the complexity of the story but we gets too much information on day 1 especially when this is a slice-of-life visual novel, in my opinion you can divide this first build to 3 days instead of just 1 to get a better pacing, like decide a key topic/information for each day and fill the rest of the day with the characters contemplating on that subject or fill it with a banter/skits or normal conversation between characters since its a slice of life vn.
other than that, the character sprites are nice, the music fits.
i'm looking forward to the next update and what kind of improvements that you make later on. :D (sorry for my grammar btw, english is not my main language)
Wow, having great insights like these are incredibly helpful! Thank you! I'll definitely focus on improving the pacing and lots more. Again, thank you for such a good review! :)
also, would you like to join our furry visual novel community on discord where we discuss, give feedback, ask help and all that jazz with other developers and people?
here is the link if you are interested
https://discord.gg/GFjSPkh
Wow, I'd love to :) Thank you :))
yeah sure, ill upload it in a few hours :)
While I haven't had a chance to check out the game I felt a few comments were warranted. (These are meant to be constructive so please do not take anything I say negatively.)
You may want to modify the color scheme for this page. Specifically the orange text, as it's simply too difficult to read against the blue.
That second screenshot of yours may want to change as well, firstly because I'm unsure if you actually contacted the Echo team to use a blatant image from Adastra or not on that TV screen. (If you did good on you, if you didn't I recommend you do that... Now, as even if it's meant to be complimentary you can't just use their assets like that, at the very least they should be in your credits which would in no way substitute asking their permission.)
Additionally censoring the curse words is an interesting writing choice especially if you do intend for this to be NSFW at some point.
Especially when it's very easy to tell what the word is to begin with making the censorship pretty pointless overall. But I understand if it's just a deliberate choice on your end.thank you! I actually haven't contacted echo about using a screenshot about their game xd. I'm an avid fan myself so i thought little cameos would be alright. Ill update it asap.
you're right about the curse words. xddd